This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 23; the twenty-third edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The theme for this month is FREE.
In the darkness of the lane,
Walking along the aura of sadness,
Was a young teenage guy.
Juggling in his good old memories,
When laughing and giggling is all they would do.
Enjoying the time with his girl in his arms,
Sometimes chasing each other in the farms.
But soon these noises turned in deep silence,
When a drastic accident took away his girl's soul!
And one day he sees someone sitting in the dark,
A pretty young girl,which looked just like her.
She holds his hands and takes him along,
Far away into another world,
Making him Free from the sad dark aura,
And giving him his good old times back again.
Don't know why life played with him this game,
All his smiles returned back again,
But no one knew that Angel was her name.
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22 comments:
really bful poem...
read mine athttp://interpretingthoughts.blogspot.com/2011/08/free.html
nice poem :)
keep writing & smiling
all the best
Making him Free from the sad dark aura,
And giving him his good old times back again.
Well written.
I liked the top and middle part but somehow could not find logic in the way it ended.
Yes, I agree with GvSparx! The end sounded abrupt to me. But the poem started well and flowered well .. except the end I mean!
@Nidhi n Sowmya:thank u girls....:)
@GvSparx n Aativas:well,d end is like a conclusion.the girl comes back in d form of an angel to take him away with her forever.....!
i think its perfect!! n despite a sad end u found a way to mk it happy. dats so sweettt! :)
Sweet poem celebrating eternal love. Best of luck for Blog-a-ton. You can find my entry here
In search of freedom
Nice Poem...really only an angel(Heart/love) can give us a freedom from endless sorrow(stress/loneliness)
here is my entry
आजाद है हम
@Sadiya merchant:m glad that u liked d post....keep visiting,keep smiling.....:)
@The Fool:thank u for ur wishes,will surely visit d link u shared....:)
@Hema Nimbekar:thnx dat u liked n ya u said true!....:)
very beautiful poem clouds.. Good luck for Blog-a-Ton.. Free... Are we?
Someone is Special
@Someone is special: hey thank u for liking my poem.....thnx for ur wishes....:)
sad ending but a nice poem... well written..
ATB for BAT
Do check out my entry at Free? To do what exactly?
Regards
Wandering Thoughts
sad ending but a nice poem... well written..
ATB for BAT
Do check out my entry at Free? To do what exactly?
Regards
Wandering Thoughts
Lovely.
I really enjoyed this.
The thoughts behind this poem are praiseworthy.
All the best
painful yet poignant...poetry which speaks of loss in love and yet eventually, a strange sense of freedom we all crave for...
keep up the good writing!
you can read my entry for BAT 23 here---
FREE
a fairytale end i wud say, hope he never misses her again ...that few verses spoke a lot ....nice
here is mine
The search for eternal freedom – A Dragonfly’s curse
@Aashish:thnx for ur wishes......:)
@Enchanta:m glad u liked my post.thnx....:)
@pri:ya dats true.....
@the critics:thank u for ur wishes....:)
Touching, to say the least.
Really liked the way you have subtly hinted at his final release from his pain-tragic as it was, what remains in the readers conscious is the bliss of redemption rather than the manner in which it came.
And for that delicate handling of your words, KUDOS !
@Brijender: well,m glad that u liked my post .....thnx...:)
A nice poem....
"Don't know why life played with him this game" - That's always the hard part
Touching poem... life always plays game...well written...something from heart...
@Vikram:thank u.....:)
@Ketan:i always write from my heart,thnx u for liking it....:)
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